English Language.
Creative Writing
The man stood tall, his face shrouded in a shadow. Piercing red eyes visible beneath the mask of the unknown. The darkness spread around him. A smell of death clung to his body like clothing. He smiled; his white teeth jagged and sharp glinted under the moonlight. An eerie, unforgettable feeling rolled off of him. He’d been waiting for quite some time, annoyed. He’d had enough of waiting. Looking up he spotted a full moon hanging in the sky, fragile, as old as time itself, but so powerful. His smile widened a fraction; it was time to go on a hunt. His prey was close. Oh, so very close.
A man stood behind a tree. Observing the creature standing in the distance. He saw the glint of eyes. The sharpness of his teeth. An eerie feeling came over him. He shivered.
He watched as the looked around. The creatures smile widening.
“Come on,” he whispered as he watched the creature widen his smile. He was hoping that the creature would be lured to him. That he would fall into the trap he set.
The creature ran. He ran faster than anything the man had seen. The creature ran toward him.
A sense of dread.
He ran for his life. Pushing his legs to the limit.
His destination was close. But he felt as though he still had a mile to go.
He could not risk looking behind him to see how close the creature had come.
His prey ran before him. A meagre human. Humans could never hope to catch him. He could outlive any human that tried to harm him. This human was peculiar though. He did not feel scared watching him like most humans did.
Maybe he thought that everything was a joke.
No one mistook him for a joke and lived to tell the tale.
Something was wrong. A feeling he had not felt for a while ran through his system. Yet he did nothing to slow his pace. His prey was his. He would have everything he ever wanted.
“How could I let myself get into something like this,” the man whispered to himself. He was terrified. He did not want to be here. Yet he could not let himself die here. He had to help the people this monster threatened, killed. Not long left to go.
He smelt something in the air that made him slow his pace. He did not like this smell. He stopped.
There was a human ahead. He could faintly see their outlines in the distant darkness. He could not let himself to be caught again. They’d lured him and told him that everything was for the ‘greater good’. It was not for his ‘greater good’.
The human had yet to notice his absence. Not noticing the absence of the main part of the hunter and the hunted.
People called him a creature, yet he wasn’t. He had the appearance of a human, the same insides, the same everything. He was immortal. A fragment forgotten by time. The thing that made him a ‘creature’ in the eyes of the human was that he ate people instead of eating human food. For that he had been shunned, beaten, tortured.
He had been plotting his revenge. But what would that make him? He’d be just like the humans that threatened that threatened him so vehemently.
He’s stopped? The man though, coming to a halt. This, of course, was to be expected. The creature did had superior senses to him, he wasn’t a fool either.
But I’ll be a saviour in this damned land after this. The man, a human of normal stature, had always been on the wrong end of something. To him, his parents had never loved him. His teachers didn’t care about him. Loneliness was his only companion in this cursed land. He strived to make a difference, but he did it not in the normal way by giving to the poor, giving money to charity. No. He found his glory in finding the creature and capturing it.
I’ve been surrounded. How… strange. They must have done something to mask their scents. The creature mused, taking in every fine detail of the surrounding areas. He quickly noticed that there was no way for him to escape this. There was nothing he could do against a mob of people in either direction. He had not noticed any of this happening.
Yes, this human before him was peculiar. Peculiar indeed.
What are they waiting for? The man thought. He was worried that the others were too scared to make a start on the attack. He could not deal with people’s moral at the moment. He wanted everything to be perfect. He wanted to be remembered for finding and capturing the creature. He wanted everything. He was beginning to get impatient of the waiting.
The creature stood there. An air of calm surrounding him. Much different from the feeling of death that surrounded him before.
He was calculating his options. If he had any.
Fighting his way out would be unheard of. There were too many people opposing. Just simply running would be too much as they would soon find him. He couldn’t go anywhere anymore without some human finding out whom and what he was. His life was built on fear and loathing.
The man watched from a far. The humans were making signs to each other. A countdown before moving in. His breath was shallow, almost unheard by his peers. Anxiety wormed its way through his system, sending him warning signals. Something wasn’t right. The man just couldn’t figure out whether the scene wasn’t right as in the creature could break free, or that the creature was going to be detained and probably tortured.
He had to wonder which was wrong and which was right. Was he doing the right thing?
Calculative eyes roamed the field. The humans were making hand-signals to each other, obviously about to do something. He had a bad feeling rolling through his body. He knew what was going to happen.
The humans leapt. The creature had no time to react, they were holding him down. He tried to break free of the bonds that were ensnaring his body. He could smell the blood and perspiration on them, tantalizing his nose, now that they were close, he could see the mud that they had used to cover their scent long enough for him not to notice him. His eyes watered as the smell reached the back of his throat, burning its way down.
Before the creature knew it he was on his feet again. Both of his ankles broken. Every step shot a sharp jolt of pain through his body. The humans did not care. They never did.
He looked around, finding the human that got him into this. He took the time to memorize his scent for he would come back. And when he did, this human would be the first that he hunted.
Commentary.
My main intention for my coursework piece was to write a novel opening in the genre of horror, using both perspectives of the hunter in the hunted to display different emotions running through the two different characters at the same time. The piece is set during the 19th century where suspicion of witchcraft was still high adding paranoia and fear in the curiosity as to what the creature could be.
I purposely didn’t name the two main characters as to add mystery into the piece by keeping up curiosity to figure out who the two characters were. I varied the sentence lengths to convey the panic and fear both characters felt throughout the piece. I used verbs such as “shrouded” to create a mysterious effect, making it seem like a veil was keeping the creature out of the sight of the humans.
The noun “darkness” is a biblical reference to the plague that hit Egypt. The darkness in the bible is described as something that spread across the land, covering all of Egypt. The noun “creature” is used to show description of the thing chasing the human”. Along with the adjective “eerie” is to give an uncanny, unfriendly feeling to the creature to personify the fact that he is not human in normal terms.
The adjective “meagre” gives statutory placement, making the creature seem stronger than the human that he chased, which then can be juxtaposed to the fact that the human in the end captures the creature. The post modifying adjective “terrified” creates an atmosphere of horror and adds to the eerie feeling. I intended on using many negative adjectives to describe feelings to create a negative and uncanny atmosphere in attempts to recreate the feeling of horror.
I used the alliteration “distant darkness” to create a dark atmosphere, and create vivid dark imagery, along with the alliteration “greater good” shows that the humans had deceived the creature previously by luring him into believing that everything that was happening to him was for the better of human kind.
I used the rule of three “shunned, beaten, tortured” to convey some of the things that had happened to the creature previously, giving some information on why the creature doesn’t like the humans any more.
The piece is set up to show clearly the two different characters in the piece, referencing to both has ‘the creature’ and ‘the human’ by doing this I am distinguishing between two characters and making it easier to read and tell which character is which without really giving any names to both of them.
Yes, we all have to put up with it eventually in our lives. Coursework. You know I hate coursework. This one was enjoyable. I loved the whole creative writing aspect to it all. The commentary part to it was the one that I really hated. I really don't know how to explain most of the things I write about. I know what I'm writing about when I'm writing it, its just when it comes to explaining it later on, I can't do it. You know what I mean?
And besides seeing Percy Jackson three times already, I really want to see it again. I'd go and see it every night if I had the money and the time.
I was severely hoping for snow tonight, but it doesn't look like my dream will come true. We have the school Eisteddfod tomorrow, and I helped teach some of the kids stuff for it, but I get the distinct feeling that half of them will forget what they were supposed to be bringing in for us. I get the feeling that its going to be one of the worst ideas I ever made. But I guess I'll have a proper rant about it tomorrow.
Then there's the brilliant news that Cirque du Freak: The Vampire's Assistant comes out tomorrow on DVD. I'm really excited to get it and I'm going to see if money permits for me to get it on Saturday. Which is why I'm praying that its on one of them first week release sale things where it comes down a bit in price. I might be able to afford it then.
One of the things I want to do this year is collect my cinema tickets. I know it sounds really strange, doesn't it? But I want to keep a journal for all the cinema screenings I go to see this year. I've got the ones from this year. The only tickets I haven't got is the one from when I went to see Sherlock Holmes and Alvin and the Chipmunks 2: The Squeakquel. But I can put a guess on when I went to see them and write them in.
But yeah, as I said, not much to talk about today, though this is probably one of the longest posts I've done for a while. Mainly because of the coursework, eh?